I read a suggestion that to write haiku inEnglish in a manner more similar to Japanese haiku, the syllable count should probably be more like 2/3/2, so I've been trying it. Admittedly, it's only been one day of trying it, and I can see some merit in it -- it concentrates the image at the same time it leaves it more suggestive. I don't feel like I've really "broken through" to finding strong poems out of it, but I'm willing to share what I've done so far...
cold wind --
seeing you...
lip balm
twilight --
my curtain
open
squirrel drops
birdfeeder
flutters
streetlight
flickers on
bare tree
headlights
neighbor's dog
watching
And one inspired by my friend Shonda:
my desk
paper cranes
only ten
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